The Twilight Saga

My morning star (Renesmee and Jacob story) NOW COMPLETE!!!

This is my first story. It's mainly centered around Renesmee and Jacob and their daughter. Please read and comment. Be honest. i love constructive criticism. Stephenie Meyer owns all character besides a few.

"Push Nessie" commanded Carlisle.
"I... am... pushing!" I panted.
"She's doing fine. I can see the baby's head. That baby has a head full of hair." said Rosalie.
2 more pushes and I could hear a baby crying.
"Awwww the baby is gorgeous." said Rosalie.
"Is she okay? Is the baby okay?" I heard Jacob asking.
"Yes she and the baby will be just fine," my dad said.
I could hear Jacob running up the steps.
"Come one Jacob and see your new daughter," said Carlisle.
"Her name is Jalina." i said.
"Jalina Makiyah Black," I finished.
"The name is beautiful," said Jacob.
"Thanks."

*Please comment and tell me what you think

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Nelissa POV

It was me, Seth, Nessie, and Jalina in the front yard. I was getting ready to teach them the basics of fighting.
“Okay kiddies I have some good news and some bad news. Which one do you want first?”
“Bad news!” said Jalina.
“Okay so the bad news is Jalina is pregnant so there might be a chance that this training may cause you to have a miscarriage. So you won’t be fighting”
“Okay so what’s the good news?” asked Nessie.
“The good news is that I just saved a whole bunch of money by switching to Geico”
Seth and I laughed.
“Ha, ha, very funny. I’m going back to the house then” said Jalina.
“Okay, but you really could watch. Just to see what you will be doing once you had the baby”
“Fine, I’ll go sit on the porch”
“Could you turn on the porch light?”
“You can’t see in the dark” asked Jalina
“I can see perfectly fine”
“My eyesight isn’t that good in the dark” said Mom.
“All right, I’m on it. Do you guys need anything else?”
“That will be all”
Jalina went into the house to turn on the porch light.
She wouldn’t be back out.

“Okay, Nessie. I’m going to first teach offensive moves”
“Sounds great”
“Seth come stand in front of me”

“So say if you wanted to kick/knee someone in their stomach. You would grab their right hand with your left hand and kick with your right leg”
“But wouldn’t you grab their right with your right. I seen you did that”
“I’m a more experienced fighter. So I make it look easy. Try that on me.”
“Okay”
She grabbed my right hand with her right. She brought her knee up. I used the arm she had to block her knee.
“See. Now grab my right hand with your left”
She did that.
“But one more thing, Nessie. You have to be much faster. As you can see I could easily stop you with the hand you’re not holding. Okay”
“Got it”
“How about you try the move out a couple times on Seth. I’m going to go find Jalina”
“Like you don’t already know where she is” said Seth.
I laughed. “Whatever”
Wanna go somewhere private when you’re done here? Thought Seth
Sure. I was actually done. I’m teaching her something else tomorrow. I’ll be back in a couple of minutes I thought back

I went to go talk to Jalina. She was in her room.

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Me either. This is the most fascinating story i have ever heard. Sorry if my favorite auhtor knows about this comment!! But i cannot belive that this story is so darn good!!! It's so darn juicy!!! I can't wait to read more!!!

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