My fanfic

OK , my best friend forced me to put this on... I no its lame but oh well. If u have any ideas how to improve it i would love to hear them. Some of the characters are the same others are not but get over it. So here goes...
Not Knowing
I'd seen her and knew that I needed her more than I needed oxygen, but then again...
School was terminly dull, lesson after lesson of going over what I already knew, from other teachers, fom other times.Most teachers had long ago given up tying to catch me out with trick questions about whatever subject they lectured in.
Little did I know that so very soon all that would change. It was so subtle, who would suspect that a knock on the door would change the reasons for my entire existance.
"Edward Cullen." called a small-ish year eight from the door way.
Man, I knew he was ment to be scary but... WOW! Scary and gorgeous!
I laughed darkly at the year eights fantasies, havingthe abilty to readminds was often entertaining but... being brought up as a gentleman I usualy refrained from such behavior but then again..,
We soon reached the frount office and I saw Mr. Hale the schools headmaster waiting for me. Next to him I saw a you girl about my age.
" Ah, Edward" sighed Mr. Hale, releif clear in his voice. Phew, I have got too much papper work to have time to worry new students. So that was part of the reason for my summoning but Alice was the one who was ment to be looking after the new girl... but of course Alice was hunting. "This is Isabella-" he continued when the new girl interupted to say "Bella, everyone calls me Bella". As she spoke I looked at her properly for the first time, pale skin and deep deep green eyes "- Ah yes , Bella. Forgive me please, well Edward your sister is ment to be showing Bella around but as you know she is ill..." She was so pretty yet natural. I'd seen her and knew that I needed her more than I needed oxygen, but then again... I don't need oxygen because well, I am a vampyre.
"...So is that alright with you Edward?" finished Mr.Hale. Though my mind had been on other things part of my brain had been paying attention. So I agreed to look after the new girl, Bella.
The problem with being a vampyre is one day all of a sudden, you fall in love. No choice , this was a problem, of course. She was humman.
I looked up and smilled at her while she stared back with a confused expression in her eyes. Not knowing what to say I looked into her mind to see what she would find calming... but silence how could she have no thoughts!
I felt like reaching out and touching her hand despite the mystery of her mind. I dreamed of pressing my cool hard lips to her warm soft cheek.
Inside I knew it was wrong, she was humman, someting I could never be. She had a long happy life ahead of her. I coild already imadgine her in a gracefull white dresswalkind down the isle and me waiting for her under a cannopy of flowers...
"So whats it like here?" she asked me as Mr. Hale walked away. Her sudden question bringing me back to the pressent. "Good" I replied only able to make a one word reply. I wondered what she thought of me, did she like me, did she think I was so dumb that i couldn't talk. But most importantly I wondered if she knew how i felt about her, ok so it was silly. How could she possibly know that. I tried again in vain to read her thoughts. Great, this was mt typical luck , not only had I just fallen in love. I had fallen in love with the only humman I could not read the thoughts of, but the worst bit was I only had an excusse to see her just for the rest of today. Maybe my sister Alice could pretend to get flu and...
" When is lunch?" she asked distracting my thoughts on why I was wrong for her ( I was on reason 148) " Um..."I had totaly forgotten. I galnced at my watchand suddenly remembered. "1.20" I paused. Lunch was in two minuites. "We could go now. I mean, if you want..." I trailed of wondering why she had this effect on me. When I looked at her she grinned. "Are you usualy this good at conversation?" she teased. " Yes. I mean no... Um, I dont Know." I was amazed by the fact this humman could reduce me to stupidity. I had no idea how to talk anymore. "So as the new student can I sit with you?" she asked.

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Permalink Reply by Niki on February 14, 2009 at 2:09pm

Its not bad, a good start. Try not to let everything fall perfectly into place lol some suspense :) I am not sure what else to say :) I think you did a good job I hope you decide to add more to it.

Permalink Reply by Ella on February 15, 2009 at 6:31am

Mr. Hale is the headteacher, i needed a name and that was all that came to mind

Permalink Reply by steph_devaux on February 15, 2009 at 9:16pm

its goood keep going

Permalink Reply by twilightmomlg on February 23, 2009 at 1:47am

I agree with Niki. The reason Twilight works is because of Edward's struggles. You need some controversy to make it interesting. Keep writing. This is a good beginning.

Permalink Reply by Ella on February 23, 2009 at 3:31am

Thanks, I am writing more later!XD

Permalink Reply by Maria Alice Max Cullen Ride on April 19, 2009 at 1:26am

i was bored so i decided to go to one of the last pages to see what could i read and i saw this, i want to read mor about this
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Permalink Reply by casey witlock hale on April 20, 2009 at 8:15pm

. "Are you usualy this good at conversation?" she teased. " Yes. I mean no... Um, I dont Know." I was amazed by the fact this human could reduce me to stupidity. I had no idea how to talk anymore.

LOL SOO FUNNY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE

Permalink Reply by Ella on May 6, 2009 at 6:20am

Chapter 2

"Yeah?" I saidbut it sounded more like a question then an answer to one. "soooooooooooo," she said dragging out the word. "You got any family at this school?" she asked, but... why was she so currious about me? I mean the only intressting thind about me was that I was a vampire, and hell, she couldn't know that could she? I realised I was just stood there looking dumb opps.

"Er,sorry" she said "I didn't mean too be nosy but..." I cut her off. "No it's fine, I just don't like talking about my family. The questions don't bother me." I assured her. Why was she sorry, I was rude, I was ignoring her because I was so busy thinking about her, anf finally I was wrong for her...Very wrong for her.
"Ok then, Where is you bag?" She asked. I had left it in science but going to get it would mean lossing precicous time with her,so..." I didn't need it today." I lied.

Permalink Reply by Ella on May 6, 2009 at 6:21am

More l8r GTG urgent call.

Permalink Reply by Maria Alice Max Cullen Ride on July 17, 2009 at 12:57am

pllz write more!

i didn't enter because i got grounted, and then my lap charger broke

Permalink Reply by Sidayah Cullen on July 17, 2009 at 1:14am

Are you ever going to update?!?!?!?!?!?!

~Sidayah Dawson~

Permalink Reply by TWILIGHTFAN01 on January 14, 2010 at 8:56pm

write it!!i love it.its awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww................................

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