The Twilight Saga

Night Fall (PG 13) this is the story of Jacob after breaking dawn

Hi I wanted to write a story about Jacob after Breaking dawn. I have started it off with Bella's point of view to set the story. This is my first attempt at fan fiction, I know my gramma is terrible and the story is probably rubbish but I wanted to have a go as I had an idea for a story. The rating is PG-13 at the moment I will re rate it if I continue with the story and I feel it is too much. Please give me your comments. I know this is rubbish compared with so many talented writers on here.....

Here goes!

CHAPTER 1 LEAVING

It wasn’t going to be long now. I couldn’t help but feel sad a few more days and we would be leaving Forks. It was funny how I had once hated this Town and now I didn’t want to leave.
Edward had tried to make me feel better as he always did but there were so many good memories here. Leaving Charlie would be the hardest thing but we had already made plans to come back in the summer. It was just never going to be the same.

I watched the sky outside the sun had set. It had been a beautiful sunny day which was a rarity in Forks. Edward, Renesmee, Jacob and I had all gone out for a trip to our meadow it had been the first time we had taken her there. She had loved it. Jacob had raced her through the woods until they reached the clearing both laughing and joking as they went. Edward and I watched as Renesmee picked wild flowers making them into daisy chains, it was funny to see Jacob helping her. It was nice to feel the warmth of the sun on my face as I lay in the grass listening to the insects chirping, I closed my eyes remembering the human moments I had spent here when Edward had first shown himself in the sun to me. When I opened them Edward was next to me leaning over smiling watching me sparkling in the sun. He had leaned in to kiss me taking my breath away. “You’re so beautiful” he said and kissed me passionately before I had a chance to protest. I was going to miss our meadow

“Momma” Renesmee was sitting on Rosalie’s knee she looked up at me with her big beautiful eyes.

“Yes my darling?”

“Why do you look so sad?” she was now by my side pulling at my skirt
I came away from where I had been gazing out of the window she expertly jumped into my arms.

Edward had of course heard our daughter and appeared in the doorway.

“Mummy’s fine sweetheart I’m not sad, everything is fine” she smiled her angelic smile and curled herself into my arms nestling into my hair she was satisfied with my answer.
Edward wasn’t so easy.

“Darling?” Edwards arms were now around us both, how I never tiered of his touch. He didn’t say anything more his topaz eyes said everything. He wanted to know what was wrong but didn’t want to upset Renesmee.

“Daddy” Renesmee held out her arms she wanted to be held by her father. The perfect picture, they were too stunning too perfect my heart would have swelled if I could still feel it, watching them together, my husband and my daughter. God I still couldn’t get used to saying that. It made me smirk. How things had changed

Edward looked puzzled; it drove him nuts to not know what I was thinking. Although that was one of the things he loved about me.

“We should take Nessie…. I glared at him he knew I hated that nickname.
“Renessmee back to the cottage, it’s getting late” He smiled his crooked smile and kissed me on my forehead, sending shivers down my spine. It was if I could almost tell what he was thinking. A wave of desire washed over me.

Yes it was nightfall. My favourite time of the day, it was when I knew we could be alone together, Edward and I. Living with the rest of the Cullen’s wasn’t very private. Having the cottage was perfect. A gift, one of the best things I had ever been given, besides Edward and my daughter of course.

We began to say our good byes to leave when Alice jumped in front of the door
“Wait” She looked at Edward worriedly. His eyes were on hers as he read her mind

“Who is it?” he asked under his breath

“I can’t tell, but she’s not human”

“What are you talking about, Who?” I hated it when they did this, having conversations, Edward reading her mind and Alice seeing visions.

“A vampire,one of us?” I asked

“I believe so” Alice answered her face still worried

“Don’t you recognise her?”

“No” Edward answered this time, but I could tell he was puzzled
“No, I don’t think so”

“What is she doing, What’s the problem?”

Everyone was now in the room. Carlisle was by Alice’s side.

“What can you tell us Alice?”

“I can’t quite tell, it’s very blurred but she is coming to see us”

“Is she a threat?” Emmett asked “Cause we can take her out” he laughed and punched his fist into his hand. Emmett liked any excuse for a fight

Jasper looked pained, as always he hated strangers

“I.. I , she stammered I don’t think so, I’m so sorry I’m not being very helpful, Its just so hard to see”

“But, she’s coming to see us?” Rosalie asked as she stood in front of Renesmee, as if to protect her.

“Yes, she will be here in a few minutes”

Edward’s face was full of concern. He held onto our daughter tighter. She stirred in her sleep, softly muttering to herself. He knew more than he was saying. Alice knew more. I would not be lied to; they didn’t need to keep protecting me now.

“Edward, tell me!” I must have shouted, as everyone turned sharply to look at me.

“There’s nothing to tell my love, don’t worry. Take Renesmee upstairs and wake Jacob, we might need him” Edward handed me our daughter.

“If there’s nothing to worry about then why do we need Jacob? I’m not a fool” It drove me mad when Edward still thought of me as a fragile human he had to protect.
“I’ll take her” Rosalie snapped “But we don’t need that stupid dog, I can protect her myself” she went to grab Renesmee

“No Rose, it’s fine I can take her, but you’re not leaving me out of this” I growled at Edward

I went upstairs in a flash; this vampire speed came in handy I didn’t want to miss out on what was happening downstairs.
I stomped into Edward’s old bedroom. Jacob had been resting in here, he didn’t like the smell much but Carlisle insisted that he had somewhere to stay now that he was always at the house. It felt strange being in the room all of Edwards belongings were now in our cottage all that was left was his old couch which Jacob was now spread across snoring loudly. The rest of the room was full of clothes strewn in piles across the floor, some kind of engine part that looked like it belonged to a motorcycle, and lots of plates and cups. It was your normal teenage boys room. Although Jacob was not your normal average teenager.
Disgusting I thought as I tried to step over the mess.

He didn’t really fit on the couch his legs hung over one end, his huge right arm was behind his head whilst the other one dangled down the side. He wasn’t wearing a shirt so his toned muscular chest was on full display. I shook my head he did look good.

One of Jacobs eyes opened he smiled and let out a big stretch
“Hey, How’s my favourite girls?” he was now sitting up with his arms held out to hold Renesmee.

I was hoping he hadn’t noticed me admiring his chest, that would be embarrassing.

“Annoyed” I replied through gritted teeth.

“What’s up? is the happy couple having problems?” he chuckled to himself as he cradled her.

“Shut up Jake” I snapped. He was so annoying sometimes, although I had to smile.

“Someone’s coming, and Edward is acting all weird”

“Who?” he asked

“Some vampire, a stranger”

“Take Renesmee, I’ll find out” Jacob was about to give her to me when we both heard the roar of a motorcycle pull up outside

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CHAPTER 5 TORN part 1

The run back through the forest felt great although my mind kept wandering puzzling over everything. Why was my life so complicated why couldn’t I just be normal? was all I kept thinking.

“Because you’re never be normal”

“Hi Leah”

I really didn’t need her right now

“ bad because I’m here and I’m worried about you”

“Why, and besides it’s none of your business?”

She was getting on my nerves

“What’s going on between you and this new blood sucker?”

“Nothing is going on don’t be an idiot”

As I thought this I knew it was a lie but I didn’t want to admit it

“Leah leave Jake alone he’s fine not all of us have a huge hatred for vampires”

“Hey Seth”

“Hey Jake are you coming back to the Cullen’s?”

“Yes”

“Great we will meet you there”

“You can but I’m not” said Leah in her normal happy manner

“Anyway I’m just warning you Jake be careful there’s something not right about Georgina and I don’t like the way you think about her. I swear if I didn’t know you had imprinted on Nessie I would have thought you were in love with her the same way you were with Bella”

“Well you thought wrong Leah same as always now keep your nose out!”

I could feel myself getting angry

“Suits me” she said and she must of phased out as I could no longer hear her

By the time I reached the Cullen’s it was already starting to get dark I could see Seth on the back porch sitting on a chair he was smiling and waving at me. He was a funny kid so pure so full of happiness I wished I could be like him.

“Jake, Jake” Seth was calling excitedly at me as I phased back in the bushes

“Seth, can you find me some clothes please”

“Oh right yeah sure” he said as he ran off into the house

I could hear everyone was back from their hunting trip I couldn’t wait to see my Nessie it had been the longest that we had been apart and it caused me such pain to be away from her. I couldn’t believe how I had been so distracted there must be something wrong with me.
Seth bounded out of the back door with a selection of clothes for me to choose from I grabbed the pair of jeans and a t-shirt.
From inside I could hear Edward was back on his piano and George was beginning to sing. Just as I was about to enter the house Bella and Rosalie
Burst through the back door

“I’m not listening to that again it’s enough to make me puke” snapped blondie

“She’s so annoying” agreed Bella

“Oh hi Jake” said Bella as she realised I was standing on the porch

“Where have you been, Nessie has been asking for you all day?”

“I slept in and then I went to look for you guys and then I got lost”

“What do you mean you got lost, how?” Bella didn’t believe me for a second

“Oh my god not you too?” she said with a sudden look across her face

“What?” I asked

“You and George, she’s got her hooks into you too hasn’t she”

“No” I said defensively I didn’t want her to know about my weird fascination with her

“Oh my god you are so lying”

“HA” Blondie sniggered

“Wolf boy has a crush on the Vamp” she cackled to herself

“Watch it Blondie I don’t think you would like it if I tore off your nose”

“Careful Jake you don’t know what George is capable she already tried to take over Edward”

“Yes, well I’m not Edward and I’m fine George has no affect on me what so ever so I don’t need you concern” I said sulkily and then stormed off into the house

As I entered the house with Seth close behind me Nessie noticed me instantly and ran across the room.

“JAKE” she screamed

“Nessie my love”

She jumped into my arms in an instance he tiny hands were around my neck and she nuzzled her face into my shoulder

“Where have you been?”

“I’m sorry Ness I overslept and then I came to look for you and I couldn’t find you”

“That’s silly Jake you can always find me” she said as she looked into my eyes

“I know but I’m here now Ness”

“Yes, now come on and listen to Daddy playing with Aunty George”

Wow George was already Aunty she was settling in quickly with the family
Nessie jumped out of my arms and pulled me by the hand over to the piano where everyone else was standing

“Uncle Seth” said Nessie as she cradled his legs, Seth rubbed her hair playfully back

“Isn’t she good Jake don’t you think she has a lovely voice?” Nessie asked

“Yes very lovely” as I said this George shot me a look and carried on singing it was as if she was singing the words to me I couldn’t take my eyes off of her. She winked at me and I couldn’t help but smile. It was only then that I could feel Nessie tugging on my arm

“JAKE” she said impatiently

“Sorry what is it Ness?” I asked although I felt annoyed that she was pestering me

“Pick me so I can see” she demanded

I pulled her up into my arms so that she could see and felt a sudden wave of guiltiness that I was getting irritated by her.

What if Bella was right what if George was using one of her mind tricks on me? But why would she do that? I couldn’t think straight with Nessie in my arms and Georgina singing to me opposite I couldn’t take it.

“Seth please take Nessie I need to go to bed” I said and abruptly handed Nessie to him. Seth looked puzzled and concerned as I shot out of the room and up the stairs to my room. I could feel sweat pouring off of my head I entered my room and slammed the door behind me. The room was dark and cold, I slid down the door and sat in a heap on the floor. I closed my eyes and tried to shut out the noises downstairs I had never felt so confused and alone not since when I had first turned into the wolf.
Oh this is great so far!!! But why are you stopping?! Keep on writing!!! I love this story sooo much!! It is so good but i need more!! You are a really good writer! I can't wait for the rest of chapter 5:) I hope you write really really really really soon! And might i add how honored i feel to have read chapter 5 first!!!
hey thanks i'm sorry its so short but my dogs are making me feel guilty they keep looking at me with their big sad eyes asking me to take them out. I promise I will write more tomorrow, you are so kind to comment :-)
I KNEW THAT BROAD WAS TROUBLE THE MINUTE SHE TOOK OFF THE MOTORCYCLE HELMET!!!!!!
I HATE HER AND WILL BE ROOTING ON BELLA, ROSE and LEAH ON WHATEVER THEY WANT TO DO TO HER. PERSONALLY I HOPE THEY EACH GRAB A PIECE OF HER AND PULL....AT THE SAME TIME!!!
This B**ch seems to get her jollys at the expense of others. I hope Edward and Jake BOTH come to their senses SOON. Actually I feel bad for Jake and I am REALLY PISSED at Edward. Edward should know better.
you're doing a great job with this story. Very very creative. =)
CHAPTER 5 TORN part 2

It was still dark when I woke up my shoulder was stiff from where I had been leaning against the door. I had made a decision I was going to have it out with George this was getting ridicules and I wasn’t about to have her ruin my life here. I was finally happy after everything I had been through with Bella.
The party had broken up downstairs so now was probably a good time than ever to have our chat. As I went to leave my room there was a knock at the door.

“Jacob” Alice called my name through the door

I opened the door and let her in

“Yes Alice”

“I need to talk to you” she said as her small pixie like face turned into a frown

“What is it?”

“I’ve had a vision and it concerns you” she said with a worried look on her face

“Ok” I wished she would just spit it out

“I saw you, you were covered in blood and had blood dripping from your mouth and you were holding a dead body in your arms” her mouth trembled as she said this

“Who’s body?”

“I don’t know I have trouble seeing things properly when it’s not my kind”

“That’s helpful, could it be a vampire?”

“I don’t think so, you were crying”

“Why was I crying?”

“You were sorry, you were in pain”

“I just wanted to warn you Jacob because you can change things it doesn’t have to come true”

That sounded just great so either I kill someone or something kills someone I love. Alice’s visions were a pain in the arse. But even so this didn’t sound good.

“I didn’t want to worry you but Jasper thought it was best I told you”

“You did the right thing, thanks Alice”

Just when you think things couldn’t get any worse.

Alice went to leave my room when I opened the door George was standing in the doorway.

“Oh hi, sorry I didn’t mean to disturb you” she said as she realised Alice was with me

“It’s ok I was just leaving” Alice said coldly

“Jake I was just coming to check on you after your black out this morning and then you sudden departure this evening I was really concerned”

“I’m ok, in fact I was just on my way to come and find you I wanted to talk to you, please come in”

She smiled her dazzling smile at me and entered the room; her body brushed past me as she did and sent an electric shock down my spine. I closed the door and turned to find her draped across my sofa. The room was still dark but I could see her perfectly there was a strange energy like an electric current was passing between us across the room. My heart started to race again.

“Jake come and sit next to me” she said as she patted the empty space on the sofa

I couldn’t resist even though I wanted to, my mind was once again confused.
I walked slowly over to the sofa and sat down next to her my heart felt as if it would explode through my chest and my throat was bone dry. She moved closer to me her head was only inches away from mine and her arm was behind my back, she leaned in and took my hand it was shaking and my palm was sweaty.

“Now tell me Jake what did you want to talk to me about?”

Her voice was soft and velvety I could smell her sweet lavender scented breathe. All I could do was look at her lips my mind was totally blank I had forgotten everything. A hunger grew inside me all I wanted in this world was to kiss her moist succulent lips to taste her sweet breathe and to hold her in my arms. She reached forward and touched my face her eyes seem to stare straight through into my soul. I couldn’t hold back any longer I leaned in and kissed her it was soft at first but then the hunger took over and I could feel my blood boiling I moved forward and my hands were on her face then in her hair. She didn’t hold back either she pulled me in closer a growl seemed to escape from her throat I moved forward even more so that I was now on top of her. Her hands were in my hair then down my back I could feel her nails digging into my skin it hurt but I couldn’t stop. Then before I could tell what was happening a great force pushed me away and I flew across the room landing with a crash against the shelving unit I slid to the floor. My head was spinning and I felt sick.

“Jake, I’m….god Jake I’m so sorry” George said from where she was still lying on the sofa.

“I can’t do this anymore I’m really so so sorry” she sobbed and then before I knew what was going on she was gone all that was left was an icy chill in the air from the wind blowing through the window she had just jumped out of.
this was really good i loved it.
wonder what happens next?
Oh, I love it so far!! it is brilliant!! i wonder what will happen next? oh, well i cant wait for the next chapter! you are doing a great job on your story! when will you write next?
OMG please keep going and let me know when you post anything else PLEASE!!!!!
I absolutly LOVE IT!!!! :)

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