The Twilight Saga

Night Fall (PG 13) this is the story of Jacob after breaking dawn

Hi I wanted to write a story about Jacob after Breaking dawn. I have started it off with Bella's point of view to set the story. This is my first attempt at fan fiction, I know my gramma is terrible and the story is probably rubbish but I wanted to have a go as I had an idea for a story. The rating is PG-13 at the moment I will re rate it if I continue with the story and I feel it is too much. Please give me your comments. I know this is rubbish compared with so many talented writers on here.....

Here goes!

CHAPTER 1 LEAVING

It wasn’t going to be long now. I couldn’t help but feel sad a few more days and we would be leaving Forks. It was funny how I had once hated this Town and now I didn’t want to leave.
Edward had tried to make me feel better as he always did but there were so many good memories here. Leaving Charlie would be the hardest thing but we had already made plans to come back in the summer. It was just never going to be the same.

I watched the sky outside the sun had set. It had been a beautiful sunny day which was a rarity in Forks. Edward, Renesmee, Jacob and I had all gone out for a trip to our meadow it had been the first time we had taken her there. She had loved it. Jacob had raced her through the woods until they reached the clearing both laughing and joking as they went. Edward and I watched as Renesmee picked wild flowers making them into daisy chains, it was funny to see Jacob helping her. It was nice to feel the warmth of the sun on my face as I lay in the grass listening to the insects chirping, I closed my eyes remembering the human moments I had spent here when Edward had first shown himself in the sun to me. When I opened them Edward was next to me leaning over smiling watching me sparkling in the sun. He had leaned in to kiss me taking my breath away. “You’re so beautiful” he said and kissed me passionately before I had a chance to protest. I was going to miss our meadow

“Momma” Renesmee was sitting on Rosalie’s knee she looked up at me with her big beautiful eyes.

“Yes my darling?”

“Why do you look so sad?” she was now by my side pulling at my skirt
I came away from where I had been gazing out of the window she expertly jumped into my arms.

Edward had of course heard our daughter and appeared in the doorway.

“Mummy’s fine sweetheart I’m not sad, everything is fine” she smiled her angelic smile and curled herself into my arms nestling into my hair she was satisfied with my answer.
Edward wasn’t so easy.

“Darling?” Edwards arms were now around us both, how I never tiered of his touch. He didn’t say anything more his topaz eyes said everything. He wanted to know what was wrong but didn’t want to upset Renesmee.

“Daddy” Renesmee held out her arms she wanted to be held by her father. The perfect picture, they were too stunning too perfect my heart would have swelled if I could still feel it, watching them together, my husband and my daughter. God I still couldn’t get used to saying that. It made me smirk. How things had changed

Edward looked puzzled; it drove him nuts to not know what I was thinking. Although that was one of the things he loved about me.

“We should take Nessie…. I glared at him he knew I hated that nickname.
“Renessmee back to the cottage, it’s getting late” He smiled his crooked smile and kissed me on my forehead, sending shivers down my spine. It was if I could almost tell what he was thinking. A wave of desire washed over me.

Yes it was nightfall. My favourite time of the day, it was when I knew we could be alone together, Edward and I. Living with the rest of the Cullen’s wasn’t very private. Having the cottage was perfect. A gift, one of the best things I had ever been given, besides Edward and my daughter of course.

We began to say our good byes to leave when Alice jumped in front of the door
“Wait” She looked at Edward worriedly. His eyes were on hers as he read her mind

“Who is it?” he asked under his breath

“I can’t tell, but she’s not human”

“What are you talking about, Who?” I hated it when they did this, having conversations, Edward reading her mind and Alice seeing visions.

“A vampire,one of us?” I asked

“I believe so” Alice answered her face still worried

“Don’t you recognise her?”

“No” Edward answered this time, but I could tell he was puzzled
“No, I don’t think so”

“What is she doing, What’s the problem?”

Everyone was now in the room. Carlisle was by Alice’s side.

“What can you tell us Alice?”

“I can’t quite tell, it’s very blurred but she is coming to see us”

“Is she a threat?” Emmett asked “Cause we can take her out” he laughed and punched his fist into his hand. Emmett liked any excuse for a fight

Jasper looked pained, as always he hated strangers

“I.. I , she stammered I don’t think so, I’m so sorry I’m not being very helpful, Its just so hard to see”

“But, she’s coming to see us?” Rosalie asked as she stood in front of Renesmee, as if to protect her.

“Yes, she will be here in a few minutes”

Edward’s face was full of concern. He held onto our daughter tighter. She stirred in her sleep, softly muttering to herself. He knew more than he was saying. Alice knew more. I would not be lied to; they didn’t need to keep protecting me now.

“Edward, tell me!” I must have shouted, as everyone turned sharply to look at me.

“There’s nothing to tell my love, don’t worry. Take Renesmee upstairs and wake Jacob, we might need him” Edward handed me our daughter.

“If there’s nothing to worry about then why do we need Jacob? I’m not a fool” It drove me mad when Edward still thought of me as a fragile human he had to protect.
“I’ll take her” Rosalie snapped “But we don’t need that stupid dog, I can protect her myself” she went to grab Renesmee

“No Rose, it’s fine I can take her, but you’re not leaving me out of this” I growled at Edward

I went upstairs in a flash; this vampire speed came in handy I didn’t want to miss out on what was happening downstairs.
I stomped into Edward’s old bedroom. Jacob had been resting in here, he didn’t like the smell much but Carlisle insisted that he had somewhere to stay now that he was always at the house. It felt strange being in the room all of Edwards belongings were now in our cottage all that was left was his old couch which Jacob was now spread across snoring loudly. The rest of the room was full of clothes strewn in piles across the floor, some kind of engine part that looked like it belonged to a motorcycle, and lots of plates and cups. It was your normal teenage boys room. Although Jacob was not your normal average teenager.
Disgusting I thought as I tried to step over the mess.

He didn’t really fit on the couch his legs hung over one end, his huge right arm was behind his head whilst the other one dangled down the side. He wasn’t wearing a shirt so his toned muscular chest was on full display. I shook my head he did look good.

One of Jacobs eyes opened he smiled and let out a big stretch
“Hey, How’s my favourite girls?” he was now sitting up with his arms held out to hold Renesmee.

I was hoping he hadn’t noticed me admiring his chest, that would be embarrassing.

“Annoyed” I replied through gritted teeth.

“What’s up? is the happy couple having problems?” he chuckled to himself as he cradled her.

“Shut up Jake” I snapped. He was so annoying sometimes, although I had to smile.

“Someone’s coming, and Edward is acting all weird”

“Who?” he asked

“Some vampire, a stranger”

“Take Renesmee, I’ll find out” Jacob was about to give her to me when we both heard the roar of a motorcycle pull up outside

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um wow! This is amazing. I can't wait to see where you're going with this and I'm all jittery now wondering who is going to show up! Is the vampire the one on the motorcycle outside? And Jacob sounds exactly like he did in SM's books...all sarcastic and everything. (you had no reason at all to be worried!)

I think you're doing a great job...and i SOOOO can't wait for the rest! (please hurry hurry hurry...) *must know who is coming...must...know.............must.....arghhh.....*
lol Absolutely Cool!

your loyal fan, Cahryn. :-D

PS. I'm the first to comment! Yay!
I really liked this, please keep writing I am dying to know who it is. Dont put yourself down your a really good writer.
CHAPTER 2 THE GUEST part 1

JACOBS POV

I was having a great dream. Leah and I were having a race and I was winning, the look on her face was hilarious. Her angry eyes raged as I passed her neck and neck at first then I was ahead. She growled and tried to go faster but it was no use she was lagging behind as we made it to the clearing in the forest.
I could see as we came closer into the clearing Nessie was standing in the middle the sun lit up her face, she was laughing and clapping her hands. The curls in her hair bounced up and down as she jumped with joy. As I ran towards her something strange happened Nessie seemed to be getting further away although she wasn’t moving.
“Jake, Jake” she called
I looked behind me Leah was gone. As I turned to look back at Nessie she was now standing by the edge of the trees I kept running towards her but she just seemed to get further away….
I would have been concerned about the dream if I hadn’t heard the distinct noise of Bella stomping into my room.

I opened one eye to see Bella holding a sleeping Nessie hovering over me, she seemed to be staring at my chest. “Ha” I thought I’ve still got it!

I went to take Nessie into my arms; she was out like a light. It was so funny how she would be totally awake one minute and then out cold the next, Carlisle said it was because of all her growth spurts. She was really getting bigger. Bella didn’t like it much she didn’t want her to grow up too quickly; she wanted her to enjoy her childhood. I could understand.

“Hey, how’s my favourite girl’s?”

I could tell by Bella’s face that something was bugging her.

“Annoyed” she replied almost growling as she said it.

Could the bloodsucking newly weds be having a tiff? Could her perfect pale faced husband be not so perfect?

“What’s up? Is the happy couple having problems” I laughed to myself.

I was glad that I now had Nessie to love as otherwise I would be in hope now. Hoping that Edwards hold over Bella was slipping that she would realise that it was me she should be with. Although now that she was a vampire I’m not sure how that would have worked?

“Shut up Jake” she snapped back at me

Maybe I had hit a nerve.

“Someone’s coming, and Edward is acting all weird” she was now making her way towards the door

“Who?” I asked not really paying attention as I stroked Nessie’s curls, she looked so cute when she slept, just like a little angel.

“Some vampire, a stranger”

“What” I thought not more drama we had just got over the Volturi turning up for the battle that luckily never went a head, although I would have loved to have taken some of those vamps out. I wasn’t about to take any chances I had to protect Nessie.

“Take Renesmee, I’ll find out” I said as I went to make my way downstairs when Bella and I heard a motorcycle pull up, from its sound it was a Harley. We both looked at each other; we could both smell it was definitely a bloodsucker.

Bella was out of the room before me, it was so annoying she could move around so fast now it was hard to keep up with her. We made our way downstairs. Carlisle was already opening the front door Edward was right behind him, Emmett and Jasper stood in front of Alice, Rose and Esme in their normal protective poses. Alice was on tiptoes trying to look through Emmett’s arm to see the visitor.

I still had Nessie in my arms so I decided to stay further back no point taking risk even if I was interested in who this mystery vamp was. Bella made her way through squeezing past Alice and Jasper, knocking them out of the way as she passed. Bella was still stronger than everyone at the moment. I would be glad when that wore off, as she was always threatening to rip my throat out every time I made a sarcastic comment.

“Edward I want to see” she said

Edward didn’t seem to hear her as they all continued outside onto the driveway. I stood in the doorway. I could see the bike it was a classic, in perfect condition “nice” I thought. The figure on the bike was wearing a helmet so the face was hidden; it was dressed in a leather biker jacket, jeans and biker boots. Whoever it was was tall almost as tall as me.

The visitor cut off the engine then kicked the stand. We all waited with baited breath. Funny I thought Edward should have read the mind of who this was and surely the little fortune teller Alice would have seen?

Leah and Seth had both been out hunting but I could hear they were coming back. They had heard my thoughts and were both interested in who this new bloodsucker was. Leah was hoping for a fight and Seth was hoping for a new friend, that kid was so funny.

The stranger reached up to take the helmet off. Long flowing hair fell from beneath; it was the colour of caramel with traces of chestnut and blonde. Then it hit me, her face she was stunning she took my breath away. I was in complete shock. Even in the dark I could see the curve of her face the arch of her cheek bones and the fullness of her perfect lips. She smiled her perfect white teeth glinted and her eyes danced.

Who was this vision, I shook my head. I knew that vampires had an affect on humans that they could dazzle and attract them but she was beyond that. I had been around bloodsuckers long enough now for them to have no affect on me.

Carlisle went forward to greet this beauty. She jumped off the bike with such grace and ease. I chuckled to myself I wish I could see Rosalie’s face she would be furious this vamp was going to push her off her throne.
She then did something so unexpected that everyone jumped and crouched ready to attack apart from Alice.

“Eddie” she shouted her voice was like an angel singing and then she jumped into Edwards arms.

Edward grabbed her into the embrace. She now had her legs wrapped around his waste. Carlisle was in complete shock as he looked back at Edward. We all were.

“George?” Edward croaked through her tight grip around his neck

“Georgina is it really you?” he asked in a bewildered voice

Everyone relaxed. Emmett stood back from where it looked like he was about to rip her head off. Bella was now by Edward’s side with a confused angry face. This was going to be good.
Oh! You bum! lol im sorry....i'm just mad you ended it there....what the heck??? Who the he** is this Georgina? She needs to climb down off of Edward right this minute before Bella rips her arms off and her head.....oh me gosh!!!! (this is getting so good) but WHY DID YOU STOP THERE??????? ARGH! CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!

ummmm is this like....Edward's ex or something? he didn't have a girlfriend before bella...did he? or does he in this story? oh dear. Is she his sister? his cousin? is she someone like Tanya who had a crush on him before????? aw man the suspense!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

lol. I have a few favorite parts:I opened one eye to see Bella holding a sleeping Nessie hovering over me, she seemed to be staring at my chest. “Ha” I thought I’ve still got it!

and when Alice was on tiptoes trying to see through Emmett's arm. HEEHEE so cute.

and I had to smile when Seth was hoping for a new friend. lol. i love that little guy.

Great job! and pleeeezzzeee post more soon! (if you don't, I won't post any more to my story *threatens*) lol. j/k. but i really can't wait for more!
This twist was amazing. I loved it because no one has done something like this (from what ive read). I was basically on the edge of my seat. You totally under estimate yourself you are very talented. My one complaint is where you left it. I am practically dying to know who she is and how Edward knows her. I am so excited to read the next installment, so please write more :)
CHAPTER 2 THE GUEST part 2

Sorry this is so short but I wanted to add a bit more. I'm not happy with the rest of this part so I am just adding this little bit until I get the rest right. Thanks guys :-D



“Err..Edward?” Snapped Bella,

Georgina pulled away from Edward and sprang to the ground. She was smiling a wicked smile as she looked at Bella.

“Sorry how rude, I’m George. I’m an old friend of Eddies”

She towered over Bella as she held out her hand to shake hers.

“Eddie?” Emmett mouthed to Jasper and laughed

“Yes, erm Sorry this is Bella she’s err my wife” Edward stammered I think he was still in shock. This was hilarious to watch.

“Hi nice to meet you Bella, Edward you dark horse you’re an old married man now, hey” she winked and chuckled at him.

Bella glared at Edward as she tried to fake a smile at George.

Carlisle stepped forward with Esme by his side.

“It’s lovely to meet you, George. I’m Carlisle and this is my wife Esme.”
Esme smiled sweetly at her and shock her hand.

“Please do come in, any friend of Edwards is a friend of ours”

Emmett and Jasper both stepped forward at the same time to introduce themselves

“I’m Emmett”
“I’m Jasper”

They both said in unison.

“Hey” Emmett said trying to push Jasper to one side

“Hi boys” she laughed as she shock their hands.

“This is Alice” Jasper said as he put his arm around Alice and pulled her forward.

“Hi”

Alice looked a bit frosty which was unusual for her.

George smiled at her.

“And this is Rose” Emmett gestured towards Rosalie

Blondie didn’t say a word she just half snorted, half growled then turned on her heels and marched off in the house.
Emmett’s face dropped.

“Sorry” Emmett looked embarrassed as he went to go after her.

Everyone turned to walk in doors and that was when she looked at me.
Our eyes met and I couldn’t look away it was as though some force was pulling me. Time seemed to stand still.

“Who’s this?” she asked Edward

I was still holding Nessie in my arms, I suddenly felt a knot in my stomach, was it nerves? No don’t be an idiot, get a hold of yourself it’s just another bloodsucker.

“This is Jacob, It’s a very long story but he’s a friend of the family”

“He’s not one of us is he?”

“No, he’s a shape shifter”

“Wow, interesting” she said

She was even more stunning close up. Her features were in perfect symmetry she had high cheekbones and a small petite nose. Her lips were glossy and full I couldn’t take my eyes off of them they were hypnotic.

“ Jacob,George, George, Jacob” Edward introduced us

“Nice to meet you Jake” her voice sang and just the sound of her saying my name brought shivers down my back.

I tried to say Hello but my throat dried up nothing would come out.

“This is Renesmee” he pointed towards Nessie who was cradled in my arms
“my daughter” Edward said waiting for a reaction

“Your daughter? How?” her face was full of questions

“Another long story” Edward sighed

“Anyway, how about you. What happened? Where have you been? I thought you were……

“Dead” she interrupted and strolled inside

“Well yes” Edward replied.

We all followed behind.
The atmosphere in the house was odd it was like the balance was off. I’m sure I wasn’t the only one to notice.
An update no matter how sort is as good as any. I am really curious to know her story like how they know each other and why he thought she was dead. I don't really get Jacobs reaction to her so I cant wait for that explanation either. Keep up the good work.
hey.....love this.............but now i have a million questions......hasn't jake imprinted on nessie? is he imprinting on this new vampire? well if he does and they get married then they cant have kids..but wait...what about nessie? ooooh i can't wait! ....and i don't think i got an update that you'd posted more... *meanie* lol j/k. but maybe you could send out a message to all of your friends at once when it's updated. i'd like that.

P.s. I'm still working on my story...don't worry. I've been going ahead into the future rather than writng where i should...so i'm a little off balance *lol i stole your words* but i should be done this weekend. :-)

~Cahryn
This is good. I am looking forward to seeing how Edward gets out of this with Bella!! LOL!
by the way, shoegirl....don't be discouraged with the few replies you get at first...it took me forever for people to find my story and start reading it. so it'll pick up soon. :-) can't wait for more!
HEY WHEN R U WRITING SOON IT WAS GREAT!
HOPE U CHECK OUT MY STORY COMING REALLY SOON!
; )
Everyone settled inside. Esme and Carlisle sat on the sofa together. Jasper stood in the corner. Alice sat on the stairs with her face pressed through the bars on the banister. Rosalie had stormed off into the kitchen with Emmett in close pursuit they were arguing. Bella stood by the piano with her arms folded trying not to look annoyed. Edward stood awkwardly in the middle of the room as George walked around taking in her surroundings, she didn’t seem to mind that all eyes were on her. I stayed back by the front door.

“So, George how do you and Edward know each other?” Carlisle asked what we all wanted to know.

Blondie and Emmett had finished their argument and were now standing in the doorway.

“Do you want to tell the story Ed?”

Edward cleared his throat

“Well it was long time ago; it was when I left you Carlisle”

“Ah I see”

“Yes I found him, God you were so depressing” she laughed

I liked her. She was funny

“George helped me, I was lost, I was very confused”

“That’s an understatement Ed you were suicidal”

Edward shot her a look.

“Any way to cut along story short, we hung out together hunted”

Edward looked really uncomfortable, she must have noticed as she smiled and then said

“That is to say until Ed realised the errors of his ways and left me to come back to you Carlisle”

I looked at Bella she was watching Edward intently you could see she was trying to control her anger.

“So where have you been all this time?” Bella suddenly spoke

George turned and looked at her

“Well I went travelling; I had always wanted to see the world I’ve been all over”

“Why did Edward think you were dead?” I asked

Both Edward and George looked at each other then at me, her eyes narrowed Edward seemed to nod at her.

“As you all know Ed has the gift of being able to read peoples thoughts, I also have a gift and part of that gift is being able to shut Ed off from my real thoughts”

“Interesting” Carlisle said

“What are the other parts of your gift?”

“I suppose you could say I can influence people”

“You can make people do things?” Bella asked

“Kind of, I can put visions in their minds it’s hard to explain”

“It’s not always a gift, it can also be a curse” as she said this her face looked pained her eyes grew sad as if she was remembering a painful memory.

“How?,” Bella pressed her for an explanation

“Well, I don’t always have full control over it I can influence things that I don’t always want to” she could tell that we all didn’t quite understand what she was trying to say

“She doesn’t always know if what people around her are saying and doing are really real or if they are under her influence” Edward explained

George looked grateful that Edward had helped her out.

Interesting I wonder if George had influenced Edward in some way?

Just as I thought that Edward turned and glared at me. Ha I forgot he could hear me. Looks like there is more than meets the eye to this little story!

“So enough about me Ed, how long have you been married and how the hell are you a father?”

“Bella and I have been married for four months now, Bella was human when we got married and had our honeymoon”

“She was human?” George asked looking very shocked

“Yes Bella was human, and well she became pregnant which was a bit of shock”

“My god Eddie, how did you……” she stopped herself “well you know whilst she was human?”

I’m sure if Vampires could go red Edward would be crimson now he looked so awkward.

“Ha Eddie you are the funniest you finally fall in love and it’s with a human”

Bella didn’t seem to think this was funny.

“I’m glad you think this is so funny Georgina” Bella snarled at her

“I’m sorry Bella I didn’t mean anything by it, it’s just so Edward”

“I had heard stories of humans becoming pregnant by vampires through my travels but I had never seen it, how did you survive the birth?”

“Edward and Jacob saved me”

“I see so this is how you became vampire”

Bella was now standing next to Edward their arms were around each other. Bella could never stay mad at him for long.

Georgina came over towards me and began to touch Nessie’s hair

“She’s a beauty, just like her parents”

Her eyes then fixed on me and again I felt my heart begin to race.

“So Jacob what’s your story?”

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