The Twilight Saga

This story takes place after Breaking Dawn: It's called Sunrise Tide, and is my fanfiction.


Chapter One-Bella's POV
I stared out the window in the bedroom of our cottage. Peering far out into the forest, I spotted them, using their laughter as a map. They were running, her on his furry back, almost home. It was raining out, but not too breezy. I sighed. I watched as Jake shifted back to human, his hair and bare chest dripping wet. Nessie was close behind, a big smile on her face. Only five years after her birth, yet she looked and acted the equivalence of a girl around the age of thirteen or fourteen. Yet she was far too advanced in her knowledge to be so young.
“We’re home!”, Jacob shouted, shaking his head furiously in an attempt to dry it.
I wrinkled my nose and gave him a small grin.
“Ugh, wet dog”, I noted.
He gave a small laugh, and just as abruptly, his smile turned into a frown and he rolled his eyes.
“Gotta go”, he said.
Nessie placed her palm on his neck, her expression pleading.
“Don’t go”, she whispered.
“I have to, honey”, he whispered back, leaning in closer.
I huffed, and he quickly turned around, a sheepish look on his face.
“See ya, Nessie”, he called, dashing into the forest.
Renesmee waved back, standing in the doorway and watching even after he was clearly out of sight.
“Nessie”, I said softly.
She turned, her quick movements graceful, and slammed the door shut.
‘Where’s Daddy?”, she asked, shaking her wet curls out the same way Jacob did.
“He went into town to pick up a present for Grandpa”, I said, running a finger through my daughter’s beautiful bronze curls. She was wearing a pale green silk dress, and matching flats. “Is that a new outfit?”, I noted, trying to make conversation.
She nodded, a grin filling her face.
“Aunt Alice got it for me yesterday. It’s for Grandpa Charlie’s party later.”
I sighed. Of course, she had to put it on two hours early to impress Jacob.
The thought made me shudder, which is odd, if you’re a vampire, like me. We’re never cold.
Nessie noticed, her chocolate brown eyes hinted me. But I pretended not to see it.
Renesmee looked as unbelievably beautiful as the first time I had held her, as a baby, if not more, but expressed it in a less childlike form now. Seeing her in “adult clothing”, the silk wrapped around her perfect, extra slender frame in a stylish way, made me a little nervous. She was almost fully matured, not only mentally, but physically. And it was hard to be prepared for all the things that would come with that new age. I’d only had five years to prepare. And though I didn’t sleep nights, it still came as a shock to me when Jacob displayed little tidbits of affection for my daughter. It was so weird to remember my blurry human days, when Jacob had done those things for me.
Just then, Edward came through the door, fashioning a jacket so he wouldn’t look too out of place in the town. In his hands were a giant box, wrapped up in silver wrapping paper and topped with a bow.
He gave me my favorite smile, and I dashed toward him like two magnets attracting. We kissed quickly, the big box in the way. He placed it on the floor gently, and sweeped me into his arms, then the same for Nessie.
He eyed her clothing.
“Alice”, he said, giving a velvety chuckle.
“Do you like my dress?”, she asked him.
“Of course. It’s beautiful.”
“What’s in the box?”, she said.
“Your grandfather’s new HD TV”, he answered.
“He’s never going to leave that old couch of his now”, I joked.
“Good thing Carlisle and Esme got him a new one”, Edward noted, smiling.
I smiled back, shaking my head.
We decided to go out and hunt for an hour, and then head over to the Cullen’s house to set up for the party. Little did I know of Alice’s upcoming vision……

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really good!
Chapter 20 will be out later today
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!! I CANT WAITTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!
i soo hope jake comes bak.. lol i cant wait.. ur doing an awsome job hun.. keep it up!!!!!!!!
As promised, here is Chapter 20-Part One. This is a fun little part of the chapter, which will eventually be longer. Here's this for now! Renesmees's POV-

Chapter 20
I waited for one more ring, and then hung up the phone for the third time.
“He’s trying not to answer. He’s afraid if he hears Renesmee’s voice, it’ll just make it harder to stay away”, Daddy explained to us, reading Jacob’s thoughts.
“I’m sorry Renesmee”, Mama said.
“I’m fine. Jake’s got the right idea, anyway”, I said, mostly to myself.
I was so tired of being upset.
“So, did the Volturi leave us any work to do?”, I asked.
“Thankfully, no. Demitri and Felix are handling that. Our only job is to stay her and guard Volterra, and lead any suspicious parties off their trail”, Daddy said.
“Nessie!”, Aunt Alice and Rosalie simultaneously called from down the hall.
Daddy rolled his eyes, smiling.
Mama seemed to be in on it too, sharing the same knowing smile.
“You’d better go, or they’re going to come to you”, Mama teased.
I got up and went to go find my aunts.
Aunt Rose grabbed one hand and Aunt Alice the other.
“Shopping!”, she said excitedly in her wind chime voice.
“In Italy!”, Aunt Rose added.
I smiled back at them, forcing myself to mirror their obvious enthusiasm.
I loved shopping with my aunts, most of the time. I would try not to ruin it for them, and possibly, have fun.
“Ooh, look at this, Renesmee! And it’s on sale!”
I laughed. Two hundred and four dollars was hardly a sale. But it wasn’t like my aunt was actually concerned with the price.
Aunt Alice danced around the store, the salesman trying to keep up.
“What about this one, miss?’, he stammered, holding up a gold sequined ensemble.
She immediately dropped the dress she was holding to the floor, and admired the new find, her eyes sparkling with excitement.
It was really pretty funny, watching my Aunt Alice shop. She was like a fashion tornado, traveling from outfit to outfit.
Aunt Rose came out of the dressing room in a turquoise sweater and designer jeans.
“Nessie, go try something on!”, she called.
Jake’s favorite color on me was lavender. I searched quickly around a rack in the Designer store we shopped in, until I found something practical, yet still classy.
AMAZING!!!!!!!!!! whens the next chapter coming out??????? heheheheeehhe (:

Oh, come on! Please write more...:)
im loving the story, i think you're doing very well, but could you please try to blend thew chapters in with each other a bit more? Like between 15 & 16 (i think) they say they have no choice and all that, then it jumps in to jacob leaving... Leaves a big gap, like what'd the volturi say when they accepted Where have they gone? How long have the cullens been there when jake leaves? And going into a little more depth with some things would be cool. Just sometimes seems like you're editing a bit much out, or maybe you're rushing? like here:

"I smiled back at them, forcing myself to mirror their obvious enthusiasm.
I loved shopping with my aunts, most of the time. I would try not to ruin it for them, and possibly, have fun.
“Ooh, look at this, Renesmee! And it’s on sale!”
I laughed. Two hundred and four dollars was hardly a sale. But it wasn’t like my aunt was actually concerned with the price.
Aunt Alice danced around the store, the salesman trying to keep up."

just seems that there's a gap.. When did they leave for the store???
please dont rush on account of the ppl here telling u to hurry up, true fans will wait. Then it'll be so much more worth the wait.

like i said tho, you're doing a great job - i'm another person who logs in everyday to see if you've updated it!!
keep up the good work.

(and do us all a favor and kill off bloody jacob!!!!! cant stand him!!!!!! GO TEAM EDWARD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
totally agree with you about jacob lol,
hahah agreed. :)
great.great.great
just amazing...i cannot wait for more...so good it is the best fanfic i ve ever read

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