"Chapter 5: Honor
My muscles seemed to tighten and my hair stood on end like their was an electric charge in the air. This sparkling man was the source of the weird scent. It was burning my nose now, stronger than it ever was. More than just…"
"This chapter is a little bit shorter.
Does it seem like I'm taking too long to get into the story?
I think I am.
Will do my best to make it more interesting.
Chapter 4: Mesa
I had never gotten such a rush from running before.…"
"I could just see the look on Jurni's face!!! HAHA! he must feel like a loser.
I want to know more about Roman, his personality and how he met Jim. Does he like her? Does she like him?
MORE PLEASE >.<"
"I love the way you described his reaction to the transformation the previous night and the aftermath in the morning. Now you've really got me wondering about that mysterious sound! Can't wait to see what happens next!"
I woke from a dead sleep to incessant knocking. It was
so loud, it was like someone was pounding in my very
skull. It was annoying as hell and I just wanted to go
back to sleep. Then my brain started to work and I
remembered what had…"
"This is a really good description of the feelings and thoughts of the Loyal on his first phase.
I just hope his Mum doesn't walk into the room before he turns back.
Maybe with sleep he'll turn back to human.