"Thank you for that explanation. The thought process that goes into formulating a story always amazes me. What we see that you have written is just a fraction of what is in your mind. I will re-read the story. It will probably…"
"One question. Perhaps I will have more when I have had time to rethink and possibly re-read this. Why would Renee not have revealed herself to aid Bella and Nessie when the Volturi were a threat in Breaking Dawn 1?"
"Well, sure. Why not have Renee as a goddess? Who would have thought. This leaves the story line open for development in your follow-up novel!!!!!!!!!!!! Yeah. You know you're gonna write it someday. I enjoyed…"
"This is so unlike Jasper. I assume he is not under his own control and we will find out what is causing him to leave everyone for Bella. The voice sounds like Renee. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Great writing. …"
"From a scientific standpoint, the description of the vampire's body as cold and rock-like doesn't make sense. I suppose the entire vampire idea does not make sense. Admitted. However, if their body is like a rock, why do…"
"Oh, dear. There is no one to trust anymore. What a mess. Fred in pieces. Jasper abandoning everyone but Bella. Demetri, a Volturi to the end. I wonder exactly what is true and what is not -- who is lying and who…"
"But so "human" of Fred to think that. Don't we all think if we just explain it to another, that person will be convinced? And, when we are young, doesn't everyone think that love from that one special person will…"
"Great chapter. I am still most intrigued by Renee and can't wait to see what you do with her character. Seems she is the key to this whole mystery. Love the wolf-vampire interaction. Rose is so typical. Jasper is…"
"Jasper is manipulating Bella, but is Bella really a cuculus and capable of manipulating others, or is Jasper the one causing everyone to love her? I think more explanation of Edward's distant behavior with Bella in earlier chapters…"