Advice on my first story!! HELP PLEASE!!

Hey people I truly need help... I have started my own story and can you tell me what you think of the perface: Its my first and i started it today.. AND Can somebody tell me if they thinik i should carry on writing my story.... :-) Thanks... x





It was the beginning of the end...


Preface: It was so cold. I shouldn't be able to feel the cold. But then again I felt more numb then anything I felt before. I was crying and vampires cant cry. But the reason of my existence was now gone...There wasn't a heartbeat within miles of me...Or so I thought... I was standing there alone.. Facing my death that was yet to come... My hunters Just smiled an dark smile showing there glistening, sharp,cold teeth.. I could only pray the others would make it out alive...





Well what do you guys think ... Could twilighters reply to this and tell me what you think.. I know its not much but I only started 10mins ago..... :-) Thank you... <3This is for after Braking Dawn about 140years Later... x