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It was March 24th of 1996 when a young girl was brutaly murdered by her stepfather .it was warm and bright outside when she had come home from school she was12 years old and in the 7th grade when she came home she sat down to do her home work her stepfather did not come homw till 6:00 her father was a man of many persanalitys and a that rarley used medication her mother died 2 years before of cancer and she was left with him aginst her will it was 5:00 1 hour before he came home she was scared out of her mind of her step father her real father was a kind man that loved her so much and would never leave her no matter what she thoght back to the day when her father first left for the war "liz ilove you and i all ways will no mater what happens i want you to be strong and be good for your mom ok i love you' as he took her in his arms she knew that he did love her but those were his very last words to her in the middle of her thoughts the door burst open with a loud bangwhen her stepfather got drunk he was all ways mad and he all ways took it out on her no matter what and he would always take it out on her she looked around for some place to hide she crawled under the bed and waited for the battle to begin he pushed her door open and called out her name in anger he reached under the bed and pulled her from underneath it and began to strike her like the were in a bar fight she finnalyfell unconcienss and he began to shout at her 'its all your falt that she is gone ! you killed her ! you should die! he whent to go retrive his pistol from were he hid it she woke up with blood mattered in her hair she heard him crashing around in his room and she qick ly scrammbeld up from of of the floor she ducked out of the window she was still dizzy from the blood loss she began to stagger as she tried to run down the side walk she heard him slam the front door the way he had done and hour before she knew that she could not make it this time this time she could not escape him she finally gave up and stoped in the middle of the side walked and waited for him there was nothing he could do to her she was already dead in her mind she did not care what happends next he finally got a few feet away from her and shot her twice one in the head and one in her spine for once in her life she was happy she had finally escaped.
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It was March 24th of 1996 when a young girl was brutaly murdered by her stepfather .it was warm and bright outside when she had come home from school she was12 years old and in the 7th grade when she came home she sat down to do her home work her stepfather did not come homw till 6:00 her father was a man of many persanalitys and a that rarley used medication her mother died 2 years before of cancer and she was left with him aginst her will it was 5:00 1 hour before he came home she was scared out of her mind of her step father her real father was a kind man that loved her so much and would never leave her no matter what she thoght back to the day when her father first left for the war "liz ilove you and i all ways will no mater what happens i want you to be strong and be good for your mom ok i love you' as he took her in his arms she knew that he did love her but those were his very last words to her in the middle of her thoughts the door burst open with a loud bangwhen her stepfather got drunk he was all ways mad and he all ways took it out on her no matter what and he would always take it out on her she looked around for some place to hide she crawled under the bed and waited for the battle to begin he pushed her door open and called out her name in anger he reached under the bed and pulled her from underneath it and began to strike her like the were in a bar fight she finnalyfell unconcienss and he began to shout at her 'its all your falt that she is gone ! you killed her ! you should die! he whent to go retrive his pistol from were he hid it she woke up with blood mattered in her hair she heard him crashing around in his room and she qick ly scrammbeld up from of of the floor she ducked out of the window she was still dizzy from the blood loss she began to stagger as she tried to run down the side walk she heard him slam the front door the way he had done and hour before she knew that she could not make it this time this time she could not escape him she finally gave up and stoped in the middle of the side walked and waited for him there was nothing he could do to her she was already dead in her mind she did not care what happends next he finally got a few feet away from her and shot her twice one in the head and one in her spine for once in her life she was happy she had finally escaped.
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Comment by becca on May 2, 2009 at 9:10pm -
Omg is this atrue story I am so happy mu step parent is not like that I would if she ever did that I would kill myself!
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Comment by Mrs. Brieanna Cullen on March 23, 2009 at 10:08am -
it was a goo d story, i wish it was a bit longer. :)
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Comment by William on March 22, 2009 at 10:34pm -
I like the story. The only thing was that it was hard to follow with no punctuation. But when that is fixed it should flow better.
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Comment by mrs.cullen/miss.black on March 22, 2009 at 5:23pm -
thank you sydney&bella yall rock bella your so right i was never good with editing lol
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Comment by mrs.cullen/miss.black on March 22, 2009 at 3:29pm
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run away love? i think im glad you like it kami lol
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Comment by Kami Black/Lautner <3 on March 22, 2009 at 3:22pm -
That wuz harshof the guy he should be put in jail
I liked it though, u r really good at writing
But it wuz toltally sad, almost like that one song i forgot th name i thnk it was run away i cant remember
Like one grl had a friend they were walking friend got shot grl ran away
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Comment by mrs.cullen/miss.black on March 22, 2009 at 3:13pm
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you really liked it? thanks i love to write i thought it would be to short im glad you liked it i might start puting them hear as my blog thanks for your suport you rock and the basterd is guilty lol
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Comment by Cleo Sertori on March 22, 2009 at 3:06pm -
That was a really sad story
But i liked it!
I feel sorry for the girl
But happy she finally escaped
that man should be sent to jail!!!!!!!!!
He better be guilty
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